I think I agree with Doug, Max - the last two stanzas are sharp without the
intro verses. The old 'less is more' in action. Andrew
2009/4/22 Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
> Catch of the Day at the Bay
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> The pelicans at Half Moon Bay’s jetty
> circle on wide wings scattering
> low-life gulls, then perch, fold wings –
> one, two, three – atop the lamp-standards.
> I clap, but shall feel unfulfilled
> till the fourth lamp gets a bird.
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> Pelican three lifts off, circles again,
> perches again. At our kiosk table
> I flap my arms and cheer. Everything’s
> glossy; the fishermen have had the best
> time; I’m counting them back in.
> The one sun winks and goes down.
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> Max Richards, Melbourne
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> Wednesday 22 April 2009
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Andrew
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