I agree with Andrew. Reading Tina's poem, I immediately thought of a
psychiatrist, and of a patient having to demonstrate some degree of
awareness ("it's Friday") --- A very spare but disturbing poem.
----- Original Message -----
From: "andrew burke" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Friday, March 06, 2009 9:07 PM
Subject: Re: My slow snap - Bass (slight amendment)
> Kasper, a poem is not all in the words said but much of many in the words
> that are not said.
>
> The tone of that first verse and the 'bow' as a response puts me in mind
> of
> my first stay in hospital for a 'breakdown' (old fashioned word used
> then).
> The shrink talked to me in that tone of voice and I bowed to his will - so
> that's how I read this now, and a full characterisation occurs.
> 'Nondescript' in as much as it doesn't describe, but it sows the seed for
> any fertile imagination to germinate. Description would limit it to the
> imagination of the poet, and not invite the reader in to create.
>
> Thanks, Tina.
>
> Andrew
>
> 2009/3/7 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>
>
>> 'fraid I don't see much at all in this. very basic, very nondescript.
>>
>> KS
>>
>> 2009/3/7 Tina Bass <[log in to unmask]>
>>
>> > > and when you say 'it's fine'
>> > >
>> > > it's fine in the way that
>> > >
>> > > all your decisions are fine
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > > and I bow my head as you leave
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > > when you say 'fine'
>> > >
>> > > I repeat, 'fine' over and over
>> > >
>> > > until my mantra
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > > starts picking up pieces
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > > puts them together
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
>> > >
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>
>
> --
> Andrew
> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
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