Caleb states ' Brevity and directness' are his current interests. 'Brevity'
is always a good thing in poetry, yes, I agree there - but directness needs
to be for a reason, most rewardingly a subtle reason.
just my thoughts ...
andrew
2009/2/23 Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]>
> And isn't that the beauty of poetry? Something that might transport me is
> an
> ill-sorted mess to someone else.
>
> I'm sticking with it. Brevity and directness are two interests of mine in
> poetry right now.
>
> Caleb
>
> On Mon, Feb 23, 2009 at 10:33 AM, Martin Walker <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > I'm sorry to say that it does almost nothing for me. I dislike that
> fistful
> > of consonants in "love with Sarah's", the repetition of "its" in two
> lines.
> > It has been shown, I believe, that chimpanzees can use their tongues and
> > mouths to vocalise; they are not tongue-tied but lack certain genes and
> see
> > no point in learning to talk, I guess, and apes are not ugly to each
> other.
> > Scholars do not fall in love with the object of their attention, though
> they
> > may be obsessed with it. The useless repetition in this pair of quatrains
> > suggests that the latter is the case rather than love here.
> > cheers
> > Martin
> >
> >
> > Gimme eastern trimmin' where women are women
> > In high silk hose and peekaboo clothes
> > And French perfume that rocks the room
> > And I'm all yours in buttons and bows.
> > Livingston/Evans 1947
> > ----- Original Message ----- From: "Caleb Cluff" <[log in to unmask]>
> > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > Sent: Sunday, February 22, 2009 11:27 PM
> > Subject: DM Thomas interview
> >
> >
> > In Saturday's *Age
> >> *newspaper<
> >>
> http://www.theage.com.au/news/entertainment/books/hotel-of-broken-dreams/2009/02/20/1234633035833.html
> >> >,
> >> but moreso striking for this elegant piece, that does everything I
> >> expect
> >> and desire in a poem, in eight lines.
> >>
> >> I fell in love with Sarah's nape
> >> Between her short black hair and collar
> >> Ugly and tongue-tied as an ape
> >> I fell in love with Sarah's nape
> >>
> >> Its coolness, whiteness, slender shape
> >> She never knew I was its scholar
> >> I fell in love with Sarah's nape
> >> Between her short black hair and collar.
> >>
> >> He is online here <http://www.dmthomasonline.com/>
> >>
> >> Caleb
> >>
> >
>
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Andrew
http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
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