Yeah, but....
That 'snipping up pieces of sound and redistributing them throughout a
poem' sounds so mechanical to me; discovering rhymes (or rimes as
Robert Duncan has it) emerging in the writing is one thing, but this,
hmmnn, I'm not so sure.
On the other hand, maybe that is what you did, just found them & then
let them go in the writing, & if I had anything to say further it
might only be to try how you say those lines, for the first two
stanzas also sound much more closed as verse than the rest.
Doug
On 13-Feb-09, at 5:30 PM, andrew burke wrote:
> Maybe this quote from the latest Paris Review is pertinent:
>
> *The Art of Poetry No.
> 94*<http://www.theparisreview.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/5889>
> *Kay Ryan*
>
> What's recombinant rhyme? It's like how they add a snip of the
> jellyfish's
> glow-in-the-dark gene to bunnies and make them glow green; by
> snipping up
> pieces of sound and redistributing them throughout a poem I found I
> could
> get the poem to go a little bit luminescent.
>
>
> Interesting ...
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