Maybe this quote from the latest Paris Review is pertinent:
*The Art of Poetry No.
94*<http://www.theparisreview.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/5889>
*Kay Ryan*
What's recombinant rhyme? It's like how they add a snip of the jellyfish's
glow-in-the-dark gene to bunnies and make them glow green; by snipping up
pieces of sound and redistributing them throughout a poem I found I could
get the poem to go a little bit luminescent.
Interesting ...
2009/2/14 andrew burke <[log in to unmask]>
> Thanks, Randolph, I'll look at that.
>
> The weather here is cool today. There have even been drops of rain.
> (unusual for this time of year.)
>
> Andrew
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> 2009/2/14 Randolph Healy <[log in to unmask]>
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> I take Doug's point. However, I think dropping the rhyme follows the idea
>> of "falling away", following up the "pensive" as an act of reflection.
>>
>> Just a thought, but perhaps changing the final "itself" to something like
>> "in any case" might bring back the rhyme at the end, a circular, if not
>> egg-shaped closure, and double the reflection.
>>
>> best
>>
>> Randolph
>>
>> andrew burke wrote:
>>
>>> Yes, I only noticed that after writing - it wasn't a set musical piece,
>>> so I
>>> shall probably edit to avoid them. My wife hates it, yet my best 'editor'
>>> friend loves it. Whaddyado, Magoo!
>>>
>>> Andrew
>>>
>>> 2009/2/14 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
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>>>
>>>> I like the thinking in this Andrew, but was prepared for end rhymes by
>>>> the
>>>> first 2 stanzas, not followed through....
>>>>
>>>> Doug
>>>>
>>>> On 11-Feb-09, at 9:37 PM, andrew burke wrote:
>>>>
>>>> After lunch I throw
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>> the eggshell away.
>>>>>
>>>>> In my pensive mood
>>>>> I think of it as everyday
>>>>>
>>>>> as the falling away
>>>>> layers of living flesh
>>>>>
>>>>> as we go about,
>>>>> walking, thinking, writing.
>>>>>
>>>>> As to the egg, I have
>>>>> little knowledge to
>>>>>
>>>>> respond philosophically.
>>>>> Instead, I brush my teeth,
>>>>>
>>>>> this habit of a lifetime
>>>>> a kind of shell itself.
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> --
>>>>> Andrew
>>>>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>>
>>>> Awards are merely the badges of mediocrity.
>>>>
>>>> Charles Ives
>>>>
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