Hi Arthur. Thankyou very much for that, no I've not read 'Sons and Lovers' though I ought to get around to it as I'm quite fond of Lawrence's poetry.
Cheers
Marion
--- On Tue, 6/1/09, Arthur Seeley <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> From: Arthur Seeley <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Re: Town Song
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Date: Tuesday, 6 January, 2009, 6:42 PM
> Hello Marion. Welcome to the List. You have some very
> intriguing images working here. Taxis that haunt, ambulances
> that float and streets that smoke all help to create a dream
> like quality which I think you were aiming for. I
> particularly like ' a pint of mist'.
> I would get rid of the 'But' and just have
> 'The church that is...'
> This was a quiet meditative walk and a similar meditative
> poem that resulted.
> Have you ever read 'Sons and Lovers'? There is a
> passage in there where mrs Morrel goes into the backyard of
> her house in moonlight and she experiences the some heady
> perfumes. Lawrence used this passage to emphasise the
> sensibilities of his mother as opposed to rough brutishness
> of his father. I see this poem in a similar light.
> A good poem so we are off to a flyer. Thank you Marion.>
> Date: Tue, 6 Jan 2009 18:30:16 +0000> From:
> [log in to unmask]> Subject: Town Song> To:
> [log in to unmask]> > Taxis haunt the
> highways,> an ambulance floats by me> as I walk the
> broken pavements of my town.> The streets, they smoke in
> moonlight,> the tide stops short at midnight> and I
> dream of music rising from the crown > of sleeping rocks
> and a ship tied-up to docks.> The beach imprints itself
> on my feet> and in a pint of mist the hills have
> drowned.> But the church that is a house now> with a
> satellite dish attached> sings the song burning in my
> mouth:> (Amazing grace, how sweet the sound…)> >
> I don't know how to italicise in an email so I've
> bracketed the line that should be in italics.> > >
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