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From: "David Bircumshaw" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Sunday, January 11, 2009 9:05 PM
Subject: Re: "Obscure Line"
Fred
I'm catching up on things, as apart from the holiday hiatus I've all
sorts of computer problems (again) but I very much like the the first
and last lines of the Obscure Line. They have a real flavour: the
violence of line one, and the comedic psychology of the last. Like the
exposition in between too, been there!
Best
Dave
Thanks, Dave!! Hope your computer is healthy again. I'm glad of feedback
on this poem.
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