On Thu, 15 Jan 2009 08:35:24 -0800, Douglas Barbour
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> visually acute, Robert.
> although I wonder what would happen if you took out the 'we'....
> (BTW I wrote my stark & shadows last night & sent it in before looking
> at this; what night suggests, I guess)....
If I took out the "we" all the way through you'd think I went into the
field with the blanket by myself and then what would you think of me? But
seriously folks...I tried to stick to the nine syllables throughout and
the "we" fit. I wrote the first line and then used that count. A feeble
effort to find structure...rob.
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