Thanks for the feedback Doug. I did intend for that last line to stand alone. I'm not sure at all sure where the line-space went!
Tina -------------------------------------------------------------- [log in to unmask] http://www.fatmandancing.co.uk http://www.myspace.com/fat_man_dancing > Date: Sun, 18 Jan 2009 10:52:54 -0700> From: [log in to unmask]> Subject: Re: poem: GRIP> To: [log in to unmask]> > title's neat too, Tina, but I like that final line in the first > version, as a separate stanza...> > tough little view.> > Doug> On 17-Jan-09, at 4:28 PM, Tina Bass wrote:> > > the title has changed from nothing to _Grip_> >> >> >> > LIKE a raindrop finding its way into a house> > reminding that it> > is no more> > than a shack> > much less than a cave> >> > all houses fall> > given time> > enough raindrops> > and a householder > > -------------------------------------------------------------- [log in to unmask] > > http://www.fatmandancing.co.uk http://www.myspace.com/fat_man_dancing> >> > Douglas Barbour> [log in to unmask]> > http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/> > Latest books:> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664> Wednesdays'> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html> > Oh, goddamnit, we forgot the silent prayer.> > Dwight D, Eisenhower> [at a cabinet meeting]
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