Thanks, Judy.
You know of late I've become very aware of the price poetry extols on
its victims. I've also developed this horror as being seen as +a
poet+, I just want to be a human being, and the terrible thing is that
even those I've been closest to see me as a machine for making poems,
I'd rather be a bricklayer, as I've said before!
It isn't as if I'm a famous poet, just regarded in my extended
backyard, how people at the top of the poetry tree cope with it I
don't know, I couldn't!
Best
Dave
2008/12/27 Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>:
> I think you did beautifully! Besides, like the birth of a child, when a
> poem's ready to arrive, it will artfully confound sleep.
> J
>
> 2008/12/26 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>
>
>> Well it's the best I can do at just after four o'clock in the morning
>> local time, Judy! I do know what you mean about making the analogy
>> 'worked', that's why I left it at four lines.
>>
>> Care
>>
>> Dave
>>
>> 2008/12/27 Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>:
>> > Gorgeous last line, especially, Dave. I keep wanting to take out "snowed
>> by
>> > the fall of" bcuz it seems 'worked' to extend the analogy, whereas 'the
>> > slush of waking' and 'the soft slow flakes' play----perfectly balanced,
>> > gently startling, thought-bringing.
>> > Best,
>> >
>> > Judy
>> >
>> >
>> > 2008/12/26 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>
>> >
>> >> Even as I remember them, they fall from me.
>> >> Perhaps we were once a part, apart now
>> >> in the slush of waking, snowed by the fall
>> >> of the soft slow flakes of shall we call it time?
>> >>
>> >> --
>> >> David Bircumshaw
>> >> Website and A Chide's Alphabet
>> >> http://homepage.ntlworld.com/david.bircumshaw/
>> >> The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
>> >> Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.co.uk
>> >>
>> >
>>
>>
>>
>> --
>> David Bircumshaw
>> Website and A Chide's Alphabet
>> http://homepage.ntlworld.com/david.bircumshaw/
>> The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
>> Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.co.uk
>>
>
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David Bircumshaw
Website and A Chide's Alphabet http://homepage.ntlworld.com/david.bircumshaw/
The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.co.uk
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