Gorgeous last line, especially, Dave. I keep wanting to take out "snowed by
the fall of" bcuz it seems 'worked' to extend the analogy, whereas 'the
slush of waking' and 'the soft slow flakes' play----perfectly balanced,
gently startling, thought-bringing.
Best,
Judy
2008/12/26 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>
> Even as I remember them, they fall from me.
> Perhaps we were once a part, apart now
> in the slush of waking, snowed by the fall
> of the soft slow flakes of shall we call it time?
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> David Bircumshaw
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