thanks Doug & Judy for the great advice. verbs are little ruffians that
sometimes need extracating. underway!
KS
2008/10/1 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> Kasper
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> I somewhat second Judy, but also wonder if you can rid the piece of the
> 'is's & 'are's, get those lines out of the somewhat passive sense.
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> the colours shine...
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> Doug
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> On 30-Sep-08, at 4:49 AM, kasper salonen wrote:
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> disregard that earlier version, it's got more of a form now. here:
>> http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfr8jjpv_79k95xpsj8
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>> KS
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