Egad, I love this, Dave!
'Dickensian uncle' like smoke--wonderful!
Anyway you can reconfigure slightly or unslightly to replace 'gathers....o n
the horizon'? Give it a nice strong Birk verb or verby boat?
Best,
Judy
2008/9/25 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>
> Gasp
>
> When there was a certainty lodged in this head
> it proclaimed little fiefdoms of should or should not
> as if to reassure itself of who it was who spoke
> in case a chance glance at a shoulder-focussed
>
> mirror might say: no you are not. Smoke
> gathers heavy on the horizon like a leftover
> Dickensian uncle, poor lungs grasp
> at breath, there might/ must have been some
>
> point to say point say what what point?
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