thanks guys.
Judy-- I'm aware of the literal trip possibility there, but they really were
swallows so the whole idea would be changed if that word were changed.
also this is about a specific human female person. and while the image of
some weird antenna-woman is certainly off-putting, that also isn't the
intended image; it so happened (and this is essentially beside the point,
but still) that there really was a roof of a 40s apartment building in
downtown Helsinki that we spent part of an evening on. I also tried to make
the 'roof/antenna' image less weird or abstract by grounding it in a
reference back to the earlier, more 'experiencing' stanza.
Doug-- surprising, because I've hardly read a single word of DT all year. I
went through a phase of conscious Thomasisms, but that has long since
passed; but now you mention it I do see how that influence could be
construed in this poem. albeit I lack, intentionally, his level of
structural & rhythmic intentionality. because that would be likely to go
overboard with anyone except that besotted welshman.
KS
2008/9/18 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> i think some of the triplets work well, Kasper, but it's a bit too
> DylanThomasy for me.
>
> Doug
> On 18-Sep-08, at 8:26 AM, kasper salonen wrote:
>
> well since you ask, here for now:
>> http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfr8jjpv_76g6m2shxj&hl=en
>> and soon to be found between a front & back cover. eh, as soon as soon can
>> be with the crowd I'm working with on this anthology/collection.
>> more news as desperation makes way for tittery glee.
>>
>
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