Touching, Dave, and foreshadowed by you earlier touchingly.
A merging perhaps of the signs of physical illness and psychic?
The 'Nil Feed' p.s. brings us back to the physical extremity of course.
That aspect might in a rewrite appear in an opening sentence
On 19/6/08 1:30 AM, "David Bircumshaw" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I found myself
> watching you, my friend,
> as you drowned
> in yourself
>
> and I stood on that precarious
> bank, the falling,
> where we all crumble,
> looking on
>
> as you went
> down that breathless
> torrent that is us.
>
>
> (This is for my friend, Brian Fewster, who died in the small hours. I
> was with him on the evening, it was upsetting, there was this Nil Feed
> sign in red letters over his bed. Can't say much more than that)
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