I was trying to think of what to say, & Max has caught the depths of
the poem, Sharon.
I wonder if perhaps you could put a little note of colour for the
hair, & then not need the rather flat 'I am sixty,' I think just saying
I try to stand up straight.
I try to hold my head
high. It's heavy.
is enough. And if you could drop a few of the 'is's in the first
stanza...?
But it does tell.
Doug
On 24-Jun-08, at 9:49 PM, Max Richards wrote:
> Full of lived life, I feel.
>
> I note all the colour is in the garden, none in the hair.
>
> (And is there a market where you are for human hair...?)
>
> Best wishes from Max
>
>
> On 25/6/08 1:04 PM, "sharon brogan" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> "Why cut your hair?"
Douglas Barbour
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In football the object is for the quarterback, also known as the field
general, to be on target with his aerial assault, riddling the defense
by hitting his receivers with deadly accuracy in spite of the blitz,
even if he has to use shotgun. With short bullet passes and long
bombs, he marches his troops into enemy territory, balancing this
aerial assault with a sustained ground attack that punches holes in
the forward wall of the enemy's defensive line.
In baseball the object is to go home!
George Carlin, RIP
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