That's good, Fred, good. Thanks ... Andrew
2008/5/4 Frederick Pollack <[log in to unmask]>:
> Andrew, all this needs is cutting and tightening. Here's what I suggest:
>
>
> DETAIL
>
> The house whispers
> its discontent and keeps me up
> with its incessant whining.
> The trick would be to turn off,
> like the filament in the bedside lamp
> when I press the plastic button
> beneath the shade. The physics
> of the real world, not the metaphoric,
> are life without you: the dozen
> details of each event – bringing in
> The West Australian, shaking it free
> of dew, watering your plants,
> removing my wet sandals. Details.
> Like the atmospheric control light
> I've never noticed in
> the refrigerator before. Beep,
> it complains. Beep. Beep. Details
> like that. I can tell you now
> you're so far away how many
> steps lead from the front door
> to the letterbox. The house rises before me
> and clears each room of any life
> that might be there to join me
> as I rise from my chair, walk out, say
> 'Hello?', return and read
> your itinerary again.
>
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Andrew
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