And I'd make a decision to use either 'hums' or 'rumbles' but don't give the
reader a choice to make -
The word 'struck' can be read as in theatrical 'strike the scene' or
'struck' as in hit with force. It doesn't do much of a job here for me, so I
agree with Judy.
Good one, Kasper. A 'snap' in time may instigate nine >g<
Andrew
2008/5/11 judy prince <[log in to unmask]>:
> U done it, K! A snappy powerhouse, that! I'd only wanna strike "struck".
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> Judy
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> ----- Original Message ----- From: "kasper salonen" <[log in to unmask]>
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> Sent: Saturday, May 10, 2008 8:08 PM
> Subject: just a snap
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>
> I know it's nowhere near wednesday, but I almost never SNAP so now
>> that I have I thought I'd share.
>> http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfr8jjpv_72q38xmwr3
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>> KS
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Andrew
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