That's it exactly, except for the line breaks in stanza 2 and 4, but if you don't mind, I am going to keep your breaks because I like them better than mine. Thanks so much!
I'm going to assume the stanzas were as follows, Larissa, they certainly can be fiddled.
Doug
Ramon Fernandez, tell me, if you know,
the order of my words.
This body, wholly
holy, sings as best it can, lisping the mantra
“sole.”
Alone. Why did the
singing stop, and why?
No, I never broke
an honest sweat, did I think the ocean
would forget?
In the horizon’s glance
I see a wave rise, rise, rise and die,
out of nowhere again, but why?
On 30-Apr-08, at 12:28 PM, Larissa Shmailo wrote:
> Sea (sic)
Douglas Barbour
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I'm going to assume the stanzas were as follows, Larissa, they certainly can be fiddled.
Doug
Ramon Fernandez, tell me, if you know,
the order of my words.
This body, wholly
holy, sings as best it can, lisping the mantra
“sole.”
Alone. Why did the
singing stop, and why?
No, I never broke
an honest sweat, did I think the ocean
would forget?
In the horizon’s glance
I see a wave rise, rise, rise and die,
out of nowhere again, but why?
On 30-Apr-08, at 12:28 PM, Larissa Shmailo wrote:
> Sea (sic)
Douglas Barbour
[log in to unmask]
http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
Latest books:
Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
Wednesdays'
http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
There are no wrong notes!
Thelonious Sphere Monk
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