I'm thinking that this little poem is getting a great deal of thoughtful
attention.
I've looked up "apostrophic".
I'm revising.
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On Sat, May 24, 2008 at 5:53 AM, Liz Kirby <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> I like it, I wonder what Sharon thinks......
>
> Doesnt it sound even more like Lorca now?
>
> Liz
>
> 2008/5/24 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>:
>
> > that's pretty much exactly what I was thinking of. good take Judy
> >
> > KS
> >
> > 2008/5/23 judy prince <[log in to unmask]>:
> > > Sharon, taking Kasper's suggestion (the part about fewer "moon"
> words),
> > I
> > > wondered how it mite change the poem. Let me type in a possible (BTW,
> > the
> > > title establishes who "you" is):
> > >
> > > Flower Moon
> > >
> > > You hide in the rain.
> > > Meadows are wild
> > > with lupine, columbine and phlox.
> > > Tulips and violets open their hearts.
> > >
> > > It is time to plant the corn.
> > > Young squirrels practice mating in the garden,
> > > all four in a tumble of spring,
> > > taking turns being boy, being girl.
> > >
> > > This year you bring sorrow and pain.
> > > Old friends fade; old knees curse* the rain.
> > > Sixty times I have slept beneath you.
> > > Flower Moon, smile on me.
> > >
> > >
> > > Best,
> > >
> > > Judy
> > >
> > > [*I just subbed a non-"ain" word, figuring 3 in one stanza was too
> many.]
> > >
> > > ----- Original Message ----- From: "sharon brogan" <[log in to unmask]>
> > > To: <[log in to unmask]>
> > > Sent: Thursday, May 22, 2008 3:04 PM
> > > Subject: snapshot poem 21 may 02008
> > >
> > >
> > > Flower Moon
> > >
> > > May Moon, Milk moon, you hide
> > > in the rain. Meadows are wild
> > > with lupine, columbine and phlox.
> > > Tulips and violets open their hearts.
> > >
> > > It is time to plant the corn. Young
> > > squirrels practice mating in the garden,
> > > all four in a tumble of spring, taking
> > > turns being boy, being girl. Flower Moon,
> > >
> > > this year you bring sorrow, and pain. Old
> > > friends fade; old knees complain of the rain.
> > > Corn Planting Moon, sixty times I have slept
> > > beneath you. Milk Moon, smile on me.
> > >
> > > ***************
> > >
> > > *May 19, 9:11 p.m. EDT —* *Full Flower Moon. *Flowers are abundant
> > > everywhere. It was also known as the Full Corn Planting Moon or the
> Milk
> > > Moon. Since the moon arrives at apogee less than 12 hours later, this
> > will
> > > also be the smallest full moon of 2008. In terms of apparent size, it
> > will
> > > appear 12.3 percent smaller than the full moon of Dec. 12.
> > > *http://www.space.com/spacewatch/080118-ns-moon-names.html*
> > > --
> > >
> > >
> > > ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
> > >
> >
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