that's pretty much exactly what I was thinking of. good take Judy
KS
2008/5/23 judy prince <[log in to unmask]>:
> Sharon, taking Kasper's suggestion (the part about fewer "moon" words), I
> wondered how it mite change the poem. Let me type in a possible (BTW, the
> title establishes who "you" is):
>
> Flower Moon
>
> You hide in the rain.
> Meadows are wild
> with lupine, columbine and phlox.
> Tulips and violets open their hearts.
>
> It is time to plant the corn.
> Young squirrels practice mating in the garden,
> all four in a tumble of spring,
> taking turns being boy, being girl.
>
> This year you bring sorrow and pain.
> Old friends fade; old knees curse* the rain.
> Sixty times I have slept beneath you.
> Flower Moon, smile on me.
>
>
> Best,
>
> Judy
>
> [*I just subbed a non-"ain" word, figuring 3 in one stanza was too many.]
>
> ----- Original Message ----- From: "sharon brogan" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Thursday, May 22, 2008 3:04 PM
> Subject: snapshot poem 21 may 02008
>
>
> Flower Moon
>
> May Moon, Milk moon, you hide
> in the rain. Meadows are wild
> with lupine, columbine and phlox.
> Tulips and violets open their hearts.
>
> It is time to plant the corn. Young
> squirrels practice mating in the garden,
> all four in a tumble of spring, taking
> turns being boy, being girl. Flower Moon,
>
> this year you bring sorrow, and pain. Old
> friends fade; old knees complain of the rain.
> Corn Planting Moon, sixty times I have slept
> beneath you. Milk Moon, smile on me.
>
> ***************
>
> *May 19, 9:11 p.m. EDT —* *Full Flower Moon. *Flowers are abundant
> everywhere. It was also known as the Full Corn Planting Moon or the Milk
> Moon. Since the moon arrives at apogee less than 12 hours later, this will
> also be the smallest full moon of 2008. In terms of apparent size, it will
> appear 12.3 percent smaller than the full moon of Dec. 12.
> *http://www.space.com/spacewatch/080118-ns-moon-names.html*
> --
>
>
> ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
>
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