Hi Sharon
I like this one. I'm still not sure whether snaps are up for comment -
though I welcome them when I play - but: the 'rescinding' seems a little
out of keeping to me (although I'm struggling to think of the right
substitute). The first 'now' in the last stanza ('came to me /now'/)
seems to undercut the 'Now, snow'.
Regards
Martin
> Promises
>
> Spring is reluctant. She keeps
> making promises, then rescinding
> them. Snow. More snow. Snow
> again. And you, so far . . .
>
> What would I want from you
> if you came to me now?
> To lie together, comforted
> by feathers. To speak quietly
>
> into the long silence. if you
> came to me now, I would lay out
> the silk bedcover, the mirrored
> cloth, the silver bowl. Now, snow.
>
>
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