Anny/Doug,
I was sure that I had replied to this but my sent-box says different. Thank you both. Doug, I am still playing around with your suggestions but a straight cut of either of them doesn't seem quite right to me. Another work-in-progress!
[log in to unmask]http://www.fatmandancing.co.ukhttp://www.myspace.com/fat_man_dancing> Date: Sat, 1 Mar 2008 09:20:15 -0700> From: [log in to unmask]> Subject: Re: 5.2> To: [log in to unmask]> > I like where it seems to be going, Tina, but I'd edit either 'growing- > knowing' or 'relations, organisation,', as together they seem to sway > away into abstraction from that 'body'...> > Doug> On 29-Feb-08, at 12:52 PM, Tina Bass wrote:> > > I wrote this today. Comments are welcome.> >> >> > 5.2> >> > trembling from rest> > heart. thrum. feeling> > body growing-knowing...> > relations, organisation,> > societies inconstant> > flux; as it is with the earth> > beneath waves> > tectonic grind against> >> > man-made constructs> > reduce to less than a heap of dust> >> >> > [log in to unmask] > > ://www.fatmandancing.co.ukhttp://www.myspace.com/fat_man_dancing> >> > Douglas Barbour> [log in to unmask]> > http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/> > Latest book: Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664> > Stars, rain, forests.> Stars rain forests.> > John Newlove
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