I'd put the first line third, but that's about it. Very focused in an
unfocused (very white on white) (even the 'darkness' is white) scene.
Andrew
On 06/03/2008, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> the moon is a sliver of silver
> sit still, you tell me
> i sit
>
> snow comes
> thick, soft, glittery snow
> i cannot catch it
>
> it catches me
> it grows around me
> a pale and quiet burial
>
> this is the only moment
> snow comes
> i am a stillness in the snow
>
> i am
> this darkness in the white world
> i am sitting still
>
> sparrows in the snow
> sun comes, snow goes
> i sit
>
>
> --
>
>
> ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
>
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Andrew
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