Yes, I'm with you Doug. Maybe second verse line break could be 'not
speakable then / and not speakable now' - it lets the 'not speakable then'
have its own focus which is then expanded by 'not speakable now' ...
Andrew
On 13/02/2008, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> I like the concept; I like the first two. Especially the
> understatement, & how it works...
>
> Doug
> On 11-Feb-08, at 3:00 PM, Dominic Fox wrote:
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> > Another list of things that won't be fixed. First two, there may be
> > more:
> >
> > i)
> >
> > The catch in her voice
> > as she says "in those days
> > things were different"
> >
> > meaning particular things
> > not speakable then and not
> > speakable now
> >
> > meaning the aura
> > around those things
> >
> > and all things touched by it
> >
> > ii)
> >
> > Nostalgia bespeaks a home
> > imaginary as may be
> > where you or a part of you
> > are even now indoors
> >
> > sheathed against the day
> >
> > the ram comes through the wall
> > to make the house secure
> > peace comes to the town
> > sector by sector
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
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>
> Drive right past that lady, that's
> St. As Is.
>
> George Bowering
>
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Andrew
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