There we are, with Gabe's comments just there in the background, & so
of course, as Barry said, this can be a poem.
It works as a kind of personal lyric, but the tying up in the final
stanza seemed too put on, too much the insistence on 'closure.'
Doug
On 26-Jan-08, at 9:27 PM, sharon brogan wrote:
> telephone call with my mother
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