Hey, even a triple space. The single period does stand out, which is
why I mentioned it....
Doug
On 14-Jan-08, at 10:11 PM, Janet Jackson wrote:
> On 15/01/2008, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>> I still like it, Janet.
>>
>> But no period after the 'your' in st 3?
>
>
> I wanted a pause there. A stanza break might be better.
>
> & what about 'your' as the
>> final word?
>
>
> Instead of 'you'? that had occurred to me, too
>
> Thanks
> J
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