Doug,
I agree about the "closure" of Sharon's poem. It was that portion which
struck me as "traditionally poetic", especially in comparison to the
previous diction and syntax.
Barry
Mon, 28 Jan 2008 09:16:10 -0700, Douglas Barbour
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>There we are, with Gabe's comments just there in the background, & so
>of course, as Barry said, this can be a poem.
>
>It works as a kind of personal lyric, but the tying up in the final
>stanza seemed too put on, too much the insistence on 'closure.'
>
>Doug
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