Perhaps. But that ending... it gives you everything, doesn't it?
On 1/22/08, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Very kind, Andrew, and also Doug.
>
> A friend not on the list has emailed me thus:
>
> I see where the details came from, and some of them (such as the
> drawings on the bed sheets) are vivid and moving; but I also see a relative
> absence of 'poetry', or maybe 'engagement' (am I being unfair? It's almost a
> 'found' poem, in a way, as it stands.
>
> - and what he says I have to concede is so.
>
> Back to the revisions...
>
> Max
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