On 15/01/2008, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> I still like it, Janet.
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> But no period after the 'your' in st 3?
I wanted a pause there. A stanza break might be better.
& what about 'your' as the
> final word?
Instead of 'you'? that had occurred to me, too
Thanks
J
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