It was pretty much that way in the first post I got, Tina. I like the
attempt at a kind of chorus to the right, & what those phrases point
toward.
As for the way the memories come & jostle, that works too....
Doug
On 31-Dec-07, at 4:48 PM, Tina Bass wrote:
> If you want to see this poem in the format that I intended then follow
> this link:
>
> http://blog.myspace.com/index.cfm?
> fuseaction=blog.view&friendID=91532408&blogID=343048452
>
> Time for sleep I think.
>
> Tina
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