On 14/01/2008, Frederick Pollack <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Patrick McManus" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Sunday, January 13, 2008 12:29 PM
> Subject: Re: three poems
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> > Hi Freed??Fred in relatives I wondered about leaving out the last two
> > lines
> > ??
> > Cheers Patrick (with bad back today !!)
> >
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> It would miss the point.
>
yeah...but... I missed it anyway. Don't know about anyone else. Anyone??
Perhaps you need to add something to strengthen the point.
J
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