sound! I love the sound of this. Why did I not notice that before?
On 1/13/08, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> Thanks Anny (& Bob)
>
> How do you mean, "hoping it would stay as it was"?
>
> As for the final strophe, yes, that last line is a cliche, and the claim
> that the flaneur exists only in pataphor is maybe a little silly. Possibly
> it needs a bit more thought there.
> Janet
>
> On 12/01/2008, Anny Ballardini <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > I enjoyed the way you revised this version and I was reading it hoping
> it
> > would stay as it was till the end. There is something in the final
> strophe
> > that does not convince me, probably the last line but hopefully it is
> only
> > me.
> >
> > On Jan 12, 2008 8:03 AM, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > > Alien-eyed (Flaneur)
> > >
> > > So I will be your
> > > flaneur, yes,
> > > that's what I will be,
> > > flanerie my technique
> > > of touching your
> > >
> > > Flanerie, not flattery. I will
> > > not paint -- I will photograph
> > > your constructed
> > > your concreted skin
> > > your starred and lit / your
> > > banner camera hair
> > > your dirty ruined / your
> > > crumble and birdshit
> > >
> > > This angular flapper frame will walk
> > > its dancy walk all over your.
> > > Observe my mannish
> > > my collection of quirky
> > > my faux fur and genuine leather / my
> > > shoeshined, styled, alien-eyed / my
> > >
> > > Never actual/present, existing
> > > only in pataphor, yet
> > > coming to get you
> > >
> > > --
> > > Janet Jackson
> > > [log in to unmask]
> > > www.proximity.webhop.net
> > > www.myspace.com/poetjj
> > >
> >
> >
> >
> > --
> > Anny Ballardini
> > http://annyballardini.blogspot.com/
> > http://www.fieralingue.it/modules.php?name=poetshome
> > http://www.moriapoetry.com/ebooks.html
> > I Tell You: One must still have chaos in one to give birth to a dancing
> > star!
> >
>
>
>
> --
> Janet Jackson
> [log in to unmask]
> www.proximity.webhop.net
> www.myspace.com/poetjj
>
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