Well, for me, the ear is always important. But I confess I read your
piece as closer to poetic prose than verse, so didn't see a terrible
alteration in dropping the 'Therre is'. It does fit, as parallelism,
with the sentences that follow.
For me (following Olson, of course, among others), the look of the poem
works to further the sounding of it.
Doug (typing on his little laptop, as his lovely big computer is in for
a new hard drive)
On 9-Jan-08, at 3:21 PM, sharon brogan wrote:
> Thank you, Doug, and I may play with this a bit --
>
> it raises a question for me, though: I write for the page, as well as
> for
> the ear. That is, I notice how it *looks* on the page, and try to
> address
> both sound/ rhythm and form with my line breaks. Your suggestion, of
> course,
> would require an entire reworking to accomplish this.
>
> I know that not everyone writes this way.
>
> I'm wondering what others consider as they write?
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