On 09/01/2008, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> i also really like the dancing flapper lines, but they somehow don't seem
> to
> me to belong in this poem?
I guess I was playing with the idea of a female dandy. Maybe that's the weak
point of the poem -- I need either to add more detail there, or take it out.
a love song to the city
yes, primarily.
I was thinking the 'you' might be a person, too, but I don't think that
comes through.
thanks Sharon
Janet
--
Janet Jackson
[log in to unmask]
www.proximity.webhop.net
www.myspace.com/poetjj
|