That sounds about right.
Joseph Duemer wrote:
> I think my initial impulse comes from the ear, but that I use the page to
> discipline that initial impulse.
>
> jd
>
> On Jan 9, 2008 6:35 PM, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>
>> I've often considered the idea of incorporating more ear into my
>> poetry, & less page. I do revel in assonance & consonance & the whole
>> aural toolbox, but I think in terms of tone & rhythm I have much to
>> learn from spoken word poetry. though I despise the cockiness that
>> slam often incorporates, it's such a 'conscious' artform where you can
>> see every pore & all the connections need to be perfect; especially
>> between the reader & the writing. I've also heard some bad slam.. I
>> want my poetry to bear less than zero resemblance to rap
>>
>> KS
>>
>> On 10/01/2008, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> Thank you, Doug, and I may play with this a bit --
>>>
>>> it raises a question for me, though: I write for the page, as well as
>>>
>> for
>>
>>> the ear. That is, I notice how it *looks* on the page, and try to
>>>
>> address
>>
>>> both sound/ rhythm and form with my line breaks. Your suggestion, of
>>>
>> course,
>>
>>> would require an entire reworking to accomplish this.
>>>
>>> I know that not everyone writes this way.
>>>
>>> I'm wondering what others consider as they write?
>>>
>>> --
>>>
>>>
>>> ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
>>>
>>> On 1/9/08, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>>> This is different; this is good, Sharon. Although I'd maybe drop then
>>>> 'There is' there.
>>>>
>>>> Doug
>>>> On 8-Jan-08, at 7:38 PM, sharon brogan wrote:
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>> Whisper
>>>>>
>>>>> Listen. It's a new moon night. There is no light to be heard
>>>>> falling on fresh snow. Snow drifting down so quietly you hear
>>>>> nothing. Listen. Distant electric humming under the evening
>>>>> silence. A fountain trickles beneath the ice. Far away, geese
>>>>> call to one another across the slow river. Listen harder. Do you
>>>>> hear it? The crackling of stars, colliding starlight, high, higher,
>>>>> in the dimming, snow-speckled night. That hiss. That whisper.
>>>>>
>>>>> --
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> ~ SB | http://www.sbpoet.com | =^..^=
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>>> 11655 - 72 Avenue NW
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>>>>
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>>>>
>>>> You need someone to lead you to ruin,
>>>> but I'm not the one. See the neighbours.
>>>>
>>>> John Newlove
>>>>
>>>>
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