I think you're right -- I struggled with this some as I wrote. It
seemed odd to have so many lines end with a comma. But, now, as you
say, it's inconsistent -- and I do think the other commas are needed.
On 1/23/08, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> excellent. very little-mythic & descriptive.
> though I think if you're going to use commas, either use them
> consistently or not at all, in this case anyway. would you say this
> could work comma-less?
>
> KS
>
> On 23/01/2008, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > Wolf Moon
> >
> > Wolf Moon, is that you
> > howling through the courtyard
> > banging at our windows
> > stripping shingles from the roof
> > demanding to be let in? You,
> >
> > hungry, in your winter coat,
> > fur tipped with frost and snow?
> > I hear you prowling, your breath
> > puffs coldness under the door.
> > Wolf Moon, I cannot see you,
> >
> > but I know you're there.
> >
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