understood.
I love the image of the three choppers flying by; very cinematic. When
I re-read these poems, I get the same feeling I got when I watched The
Parallax View years ago. It feels like we're entering the same wild
state of disorder again, paranoia, corruption. Your poems seem to echo
these (current) moods.
Roger
> On Dec 28, 2007 1:27 PM, Frederick Pollack <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Roger Day" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Friday, December 28, 2007 5:48 AM
> Subject: Re: revised "Keep On Keeping On," and "Amends"
>
>
> I enjoyed this poem, however I worry about the capitalisation of He; i
> know who he refers to, but I also think the capitalisation kinda plays
> up to the conceit that "god is in the whitehouse", not a conceit I
> would wish to reinforce. I don't think the he needs to be capitalised,
> the blue and white Marine choppers are enough, I think, to announce
> his dull presence.
>
> Roger
>
> Good objection. I worried about that; I don't like it either. But without
> it the line could be read as saying one can't be sure he, i.e., oneself, is
> aboard. I decided on "He," rather than reworking the whole stanza, just
> because W *doesn't deserve it. Same effect as Pope's "Dulness exalted sat."
> Just as he, Cheney, Rice, the flunkeys don't deserve the psychologizing in
> stanza 2. It's a poem about impotent resentment, criticism vs. insulation
> from criticism, culminating with the boss in st. 3 *not understanding* the
> point about the memo - perceiving it not as a logical statement but a
> meaningless, "idiosyncratic" cavil of the speaker's. It occurred to me that
> "Amends" also is about languages that can't connect or overlap.
>
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