Stephen had 'skill of the phrasing' right, but then Peter C drew it further
with 'exquisite unexpectedness' ... Put it together and what have you got? A
great little poem. It is good to leave the audience wanting more, even
wanting 'more landscape'. Too many poets don't know when to stop, or repeat
themselves needlessly and sap energy from their poem.
I'll kick my soapbox aside and shut-up.
Andrew
On 29/11/2007, Peter Ciccariello <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> "Skill of the phrasing", that's perfect Stephen. I have been trying to
> understand why I love Sheila's work so much. Phrasing, the turn of a
> phrase.
> Also, such - exquisite unexpectedness!
>
> - Peter Ciccariello
>
>
>
> On Nov 28, 2007 8:22 PM, Stephen Vincent <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > I love shear skill of the phrasing here, Shelia, but the poem remains
> > oblique for me - it seems to suggest a larger landscape in which much
> more
> > is unfolding. I want the poem to open up more on that landscape.
> >
> > But maybe I am shortsighted!
> >
> > Stephen V
> > http://stephenvincent.net/blog/
> >
> > Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote: Larissa, Doug, and Anny,
> I
> > appreciate your kind comments. Thank you very
> > much. Sheila
> >
> > On Nov 28, 2007 8:50 AM, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> >
> > > & I'm amazed by reading here; lovely, Sheila.
> > >
> > > Doug
> > > On 27-Nov-07, at 7:21 PM, Sheila Murphy wrote:
> > >
> > > > too treble a cost they felt lost
> > > > to what world they had made
> > > >
> > > > it was a sacrifice to watch to wait
> > > > she breathed awake
> > > >
> > > > her aware eyes shimmered strong
> > > > and they in turn were children
> > > >
> > > > to her tiny size for she
> > > > amazed by being there
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > sheila e. murphy
> > > >
> > > >
> > > Douglas Barbour
> > > 11655 - 72 Avenue NW
> > > Edmonton Ab T6G 0B9
> > > (780) 436 3320
> > > http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/ <http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/
> >
> > >
> > > Latest book: Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> > > http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> > >
> > > As one beauty
> > > cancels another, remembrance
> > > is a foolish act, a double-heded snake
> > > striking in both directions
> > >
> > > John Newlove
> > >
> >
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