Sorry for the late response -- I've been on the road all week.

I did another pass -- editorial
http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=ddgkwq55_0g74bwm

I was trying to do proper IEEE Std citations.  The IEEE editors will
probably nit pick more on this, but its closer to their style.

I did put the year in the citations, e.g., 1484-12-1.2002.  One thing
to decide is if this standard will cover only the 2002 version or any
version of 1474.12.1.   In the actual standard we will need to cite if
we are using particular versions or not of any other standard.

The big question I have is about "LOM instances".  The PAR cites
1484.12.1, which is the data schema.  XML instances are defined in
1482.12.3.  I assume we want to map generic binding independent LOM
(.1) to binding/serialization independent RDF.  I don't know if
readers will get confused over this and think its about how to embed
an XML encoding of LOM in an XML encoding of RDF, or if we need to be
explicit in the scope that this is binding independent.

    - Dan

On Nov 26, 2007 9:02 AM, Mikael Nilsson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Google doc
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> Plus ça change, plus c'est la même chose
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