thanks, Dougb...
that's always the trick, isn't it? making everything seem in place in the
poem... certainly, the contradiction you mention is important... i won't go
too deep in the defense of a snap, though...
i admit being bothered by those word choices, as well... i think Andrewb
mentioned recently that he is after something unsettling in a poem... roll
with the failures and the fast-breaks... there's nothing like a finely
combed poem to bore your socks off...
thrilled to inspire the response!
--
Bob Marcacci
Character is not made in a crisis it is only exhibited.
- Rose Dorothy Freeman
> From: Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> Reply-To: "Poetryetc: poetry and poetics" <[log in to unmask]>
> Date: Fri, 26 Oct 2007 08:21:58 -0600
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Subject: Re: >snap cat<
>
> I enjoyed this, its swift turns, Bob, but admit t being bothered by the
> "'twas" & the"p'rhaps", maybe because I assume they would be said that
> way, but perhaps only by 'you.' Against the 'jazzy' feel, they send a
> not of archaism that seems out of place....
>
> Doug
> On 24-Oct-07, at 3:35 PM, Bob Marcacci wrote:
>
>> 'twas all it was
>> that jazzy jot on
>> the spot p'rhaps all
>> prop & pap
>> not just some
>> sun snap
>> someone who happens
>> a lot...
>> we put it on
>> dot after dot
>> in the dizzy dapple of what may
>> pop
>> *
>> purrs
>> as it whirs it turns
>> snaps
>> whoop!
>>
>> --
>> Bob Marcacci
>>
>> The superfluous is very necessary.
>> - Voltaire
>>
>>
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