Rupert, thanks very much! seldom have I received such praise.
I was more conscious with snapping this snap of repeating some
elements, like the physiology (hair, fingers, face) & the rut/wheel
image. I've had a problem with cohesion in the past, so this was a
good exercise.
thanks again sir
KS
On 18/09/2007, RUPERT MALLIN <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Kasper - this is a bloody good poem!
>
> I think so many elements are good:-
>
> now this many-faced, many-fingered tree
> > in the nook of rubble, slender & entrepid,
> > sends its satellites climbing on the
> > hinge of a bendy wire¯
>
> But also the elements make, for me, an estounding whole.
>
> "sends its satellites climbing on the
> hinge of bendy wire"
>
> "hinge" is dynamic - for a hinge for most is the fixture and fulcrum of a
> door. And this is the 'hinge' of your poem: looking out, downward, across
> and among us - set between the stars and bendy wire (radio waves, the
> fragile...)
>
> Go strong - Rupert
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "kasper salonen" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Tuesday, September 18, 2007 8:21 PM
> Subject: snap - climbers
>
>
> > the climbers climb, hundreds
> > growing one from the other,
> > extending like the lively hair of the dead,
> > a different species
> > surprised by its autonomy;
> >
> > a deep groove has stayed in this wall
> > like a carriage rut for decades.
> > KJK
> >
> > they are the wheel this cranny
> > has waited for. turning slower than
> > the clock of the sky that feeds them
> > in the tick-tick of seconds made honey,
> > made nuclear, then chloroplast¯
> >
> > the leaves ascend their flags,
> > leave a green kingdom behind.
> >
> > KS
> >
>
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