I've got a vote each way on rhyme so far (another vote agin came back
channel). I would have to force my practice and my thinking to make
that happen, but in making it happen perhaps some more interesting
imagery would happen. Dunno. I'll eat breakfast first, which means
cooking it forst, today being Sunday and my day for cooking my wife
breakfast. Life is made of little rituals and ceremonies, ain't it >g<
NEWS: The bulls and cows are at peace, but the dogs eat the chooks.
Andrew
On 01/09/07, MC Ward <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Andrew--I think it wants to rhyme...
>
> Candice.
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>
> --- andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > Gibb River Station
> >
> >
> >
> > In tropical heat, multilingual birds sing
> > in high branches, dry leaves rattle on
> > a sunburnt land. Brahmin bulls dust-up
> > as thirst and hunger bite deep. Red cloud
> > rises but the stockmen are in town to drink.
> > Home alone, old law lady lies abed,
> > Dreamtime stories and language in her head.
> > I leave my desk to exercise and think.
> >
> > The Kimberley broadcasts its text in sun
> > and shadow-puppet play, outcrop and gorge,
> > red dirt polyglossia of crow claw,
> > goanna print, roo paw and grader wheels.
> > On the track, Benjamin heightens my tongue:
> > _translation marks their stage of continued life._
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > All criticisms welcome. It is a draft and I expect
> > to change it. I
> > would therefore like some feedback >g< I meant to
> > write a hip,
> > urbane, smooth-talking contemporary sonnet - but the
> > surroundings got
> > the better of me. I certainly didn't intend to
> > rhyme, or at best,
> > half-rhyme, but me and my Muse don't always see
> > eye-to-eye.
> >
> >
> >
> > Andrew
> > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> > http://www.flickr.com/photos/aburke/
> >
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