I like a lot of this, Andrew, but also really liked the format of the
earlier version, now lost, & am not sure at all about the first 5 lines
of st 2.
Doug
On 16-Aug-07, at 12:26 AM, andrew burke wrote:
> After a number of drafts, and some suggestions from p'etcers, notably
> Max 'Cooee' Richards, I have revised my 'snap' poem, Changing the
> Sprinkler (including changing its title):
>
>
>
> Gibb River Evening
>
>
> In the shrill sound of cicadas
> I move the sprinkler
> pulling the hose over
> red rocky ground.
>
> Who drinks here
> beneath the evening sky
> with the lace silhouette
> of tall gums before
> the pink sky's edge?
> A straw-necked ibis
> wings away and quacks
> like a duck. Beneath
> ochre-red clay, amongst
> a complex syntax of roots,
> strongest of earth's creatures
> push and pull a way
> through thickest breath.
> Webbed eggs fill a dark cavity,
> a thick-bellied vein worms
> by a deep chamber.
>
> I turn my ear to
> a chortle, a choking sound
> below the cicadas -
> once, then nothing.
>
>
>
> --
> Andrew
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