I liked the down to earth feeling
What's a hutch full of china??
Not so sure about teacups of light a sort of different voice (he rambles on
Cheers thanks Patrick
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a proper life
cat on the hearth
dog at the door
boots at the stoop
cows at the stile
thick coffee mugs
coat on the nail
chores to be done
eggs in the barn
hutch full of china
rugs on the floor
teacups of light
thin as a veil
beds deep & wide
feathers and down
done with the work
stars after dark
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on a british mystery, one character promised another 'a proper life' -- i
seem to have a deep traditional streak in me, because this is what emerged.
it seemed ok when i wrote it; now it seems lame.
comments welcomed
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