the last stanza gives it away & cheapens it. WCW would chastise you
for an otherwise good piece
KS
On 09/08/07, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> black fumes in
> a gentle morning breeze
> among white gums
>
> smoke rises from
> an old forty-four gallon drum
> in the schoolyard
>
> monochromatic mutt
> sniffs the veranda
> looking for tucker
> hopping on three
>
> one paw off the poor thing
>
> this community
> a million miles from
> land mines and war
>
>
>
>
> Andrew
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