thankin' yew both....
Doug
On 1-Jul-07, at 8:41 AM, Halvard Johnson wrote:
> Pigeons on the grass alas.
> Pigeons on the roof aloof.
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> G. Stein & friend
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> Hal
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> Sal si puedes.
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> On Jul 1, 2007, at 2:34 AM, MC Ward wrote:
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>> While fighting to keep "aloof," I can do without
>> "cheeping." (I suppose "crisply fried" goes too far.)
>>
>> Candice
>>
>>
>>
>> --- Stephen Vincent <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> Yo, Doug, I join in the praise!
>>>
>>> Stephen V
>>>
>>>
>>>> ----- Original Message -----
>>>> From: "Douglas Barbour" <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> To: <[log in to unmask]>
>>>> Sent: Thursday, June 28, 2007 1:20 PM
>>>> Subject: delayed SNAP
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>> World full of trouble
>>>>> but Planet keeps on
>>>>>
>>>>> keeping small things
>>>>> bird on a wire cheeping
>>>>> in bright sun lit
>>>>>
>>>>> & in their nest upon the hydro
>>>>> pole eaglets squall
>>>>> hidden still
>>>>> grey mother hovering
>>>>>
>>>>> male's aloof white head
>>>>> impervious to cries & traffic noise
>>>>> gazing out upon the river
>>>>> bridge fields the small
>>>>> running food to come
>>>>>
>>>>> (Grand River, Cambridge Ontario)
>>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> I like this a lot, Doug. Fast rhythm /
>>> alliteration in stanza 3, w/ "small"
>>>> in last stanza picking up "squall." If I may make
>>> 2 suggestions: you don't
>>>> need "lit" in st. 2; and in 4, "aloof" =
>>> "impervious": how about simply "the
>>>> male's white head"? The distinction
>>> "World"/"Planet" very nicely poses,
>>>> opens the door on, what follows.
>>>
>>
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