And gracias to you, too, Sheila.
Maybe I drop 'impervious' & keep 'aloof'? (because I do take Fred's
point).
It was the quickly seen, so I guess definitely 'snapped'....
Doug
On 28-Jun-07, at 4:23 PM, Sheila Murphy wrote:
> Doug, the colors in this piece are so real and evocative. The
> consonants do
> a beautiful job of housing the vowels, a phenomenon consistent with the
> subjects. And the pairing of vowel sounds as in 'mother . . . hover" is
> choice.
>
> The crafting of 'male's aloof white head' is fine - wow - what a
> stanza that
> is, and that part of the poem leads itself back into life, real life,
> continuing and moving.
>
> Gracias - a beauty!
>
> Sheila
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