> There's a part of me that feels that the final two stanzas, all by
> > themselves, make a finely tuned sharp little poem....
>
> Doug, I think you're right. Certainly needs to be shortened, and that
> could be it. What do you think, Janet?
I kind of see what Doug means...
but without the context of the rest of the poem
those two stanzas don't make a lot of sense.
Possibly the last stanza itself doesn't make a lot of sense
outside the context of my other work. But I don't think it
needs to.
The other thing is... it feels right for this to be a long poem
because the church is so old, and I wanted to communicate the
feeling of a long history.
Also because I was there for a long time, in fact, I lost my sense
of time in experiencing the place and again later in writing about it.
(and half this week in editing it!)
Either 100 lines or a haiku!
Janet
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Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
Poems at Proximity: www dot proximity dot webhop dot net
Life's a jigsaw puzzle...
Some do it in reverse
They take a pretty picture
And make it all diverse
...Michael Leunig
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