Thanks for comments Richard. I will think about the title and the verbs and 
may sharpen the poem  some more.
What a lovely part of the world you live in. I can just picture it in my 
minds eye. Best wishes Sally j


>From: Richard Kempa <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: a bit of feedback on Changing times
>Date: Thu, 10 May 2007 07:44:24 -0600
>
>Hi Sally,
>
>I like how you describe these two conflicting Sunday morning urges for 
>sacred space--one indoors, one outdoors, and I like the sharp imags of how 
>one dresses for each occasion.
>
>A few thoughts:  maybe the poem could be called "Already it is Sunday."  
>Maybe there could be more of a momentary pulling to go to church (instead 
>of just a quick thought of it), before surrendering to the outdoor.  Maybe 
>the verbs "shines" and "sings" could be sharpened.
>
>Rick Kempa
>Rock Springs, Wyoming
>
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: The Pennine Poetry Works on behalf of Sally James
>Sent: Thu 5/10/2007 4:02 AM
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Changing times
>
>Changing Times
>
>Already it is Sunday; the days go so quick.
>Outside the sun shines brightly, birds sing.
>I think of putting on my "Sunday best,"
>going to church like I did when I was young,
>my hymn book in white gloved hands,
>and hat perched firmly on neatly combed hair.
>
>Instead I will put on boots, wear an old jacket,
>let my greying hair blow in the breeze. I will
>put the collar on the dog, take the lead with
>callused hands, watch white clouds
>sail over moorland hills,
>and listen to the music of the river
>as it carries my prayers to the sea.
>
>sally james
>
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